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Ashesh9
Ashesh9
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                            Incessant Monsoon fury
                   Has converted Mumbai Metropolis into
          A gigantic , oe'erfloewin' Urinal of the Tropical Gods

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wakingDownwakingDownalmost 9 years ago
the swelling

and growth of the work mirrors the swelling and growth of a deluge well. The kind of use of the space of the poem that I like. This makes me happy, even if the thought of a monsoon flooding and damaging Mumbai does not.

I don't know if 'oe'erfloewin' ' was spelled that way on purpose or not, but it looks a little strange. Not the first apostrophe, o'er is a word I have used in many written works and is one that I happen to like, but that it is 'oe'er', with two Es, and 'floewin' ' with an extra E in it.

Perhaps the extra Es are in there for flavor, I don't pretend to know the mind of the author, especially one I respect as much as you. I was just wondering is all.

On purpose or not, for flavor or not, they do nothing to detract form the poem in the slightest for me. The form and function works just as powerfully for me.

Oldbear63Oldbear63over 9 years ago
Excellent Ash!

Words and form just right

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