- Non-Erotic Poetry
- circularism
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Lips parted
breath softened;
a child sleeps
a child sleeps
eyelids flutter
new worlds entered
new worlds entered
un-named colors
impossible songs
impossible songs
drawing forward
smiling assent
smiling assent
children gambol
free of burden
free of burden
hearts joy filled
eyes wide open
eyes wide open
knowing all
laughing gaily
laughing gaily
shade trees beckon
a child rests
lips parted
breath softened;
a child sleeps.
- COMMENTS
LeBrozabout 17 years agoThis poem was mentioned in the Archival Review thread, in a picking through Lit's archive of over 35,000 poems.
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LeBrozabout 17 years agoAn interesting form, surely deliberately done, to create the circular effect.
Alana Edgarabout 20 years agoI like the way you ended this with the repetition of the first strophe. But the other repeating lines may be too much for this poem because of the short line lengths.
I tried it without the repetition (except for the final strophe) and it read very nicely.
Anonymousabout 20 years ago...of a child. You conjure up the unmistakable image of a sleeping, dreaming child. Lovely, Boo.
