Delicate Observations

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Milkweed seeds flying
on gossamer wings

Tulip petals crying
once proud kings

Fragile seashells lying
a lovely color sings

Newborn robins trying
learning many things

Featherweight spiders gliding
another generation brings

Baby owls sighing
while morning frost stings

Lovers' knots tying
heartfelt desire wrings!


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LeBrozLeBrozover 16 years ago
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This poem was mentioned in the Archival Review thread, in a picking through Lit's archive of over 37,000 poems.

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LeBrozLeBrozover 16 years ago
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Appropriate title — the words have a light, delicate, singsong quality to them.

duddle146duddle146over 17 years ago
Delicate.

I don't know which poetic element I liked the most. The rhythm or the rhyme. All seemed to be in order ~ and all's right with this beautiful rendering. Beautiful!

dcpoet44dcpoet44over 18 years ago
delicate...yes....

and i'm thinking with some lines moved around it should convey in a delicate sense. it has a different look with a twist. the rhyme isn't there as it once was. i may be missing something though. you'll have enlighten me. regardless, there is some nice imagery here........don

Featherweight spiders gliding

on gossamer wings

Tulip petals crying

Milkweed seeds flying

Fragile seashells lying

a lovely color sings

Newborn robins trying

while morning frost stings

once proud kings

another generation brings

Baby owls sighing

learning many things

Lovers' knots tying

heartfelt desire wrings!

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