- Non-Erotic Poetry
- Elegy
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Click hereWe make gods
of our fathers. Even
if we know them
to be dark, destroyer
deities, they represent
immortality.
This is, perhaps,
the first lie.
We mourn them
as we love them--
wholeheartedly, adoringly,
painfully, childishly,
in bursts mingled with fear
anger, guilt, shame, resentment.
This is, perhaps,
the last truth.
- COMMENTS
ishtatalmost 17 years agoInteresting idea but I think the last two lines are unnecessary. The idea is strong enough not to have the conclusion stated.
cymbidiaalmost 17 years agoTo me, 'Elegy' is both a highly polished work and utterly raw. It's obviously professional yet holds within each syllable a child's world of painfully acquired knowledge. It's utterly straightforward but each word is intricately and critically balanced against every other word. This poem is brilliant, R, simply and desperately and starkly brilliant.
Bill Dadaalmost 17 years agoThis is very good stuff. The simplicity of language to describe such conflicting feelings is not an easy thing to pull off.
champagne1982almost 17 years agocan be said about this relationship, you say it all. This poem mentioned in the New Poems Review thread on the PF&D forum. Thanks so much for sharing, Carrie.
normal jeanalmost 17 years agoThis is good stuff. Truths and recognitions are sometimes easier to comprehend and accept when presented in poetry.
Excellent voice, RS
