- Non-Erotic Poetry
- Fast Rage
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Heat blooming deep in the dark
Far in the core and hidden so well
It builds so quickly and so well
Overwhelming before you know it's there
Almost instant in its flare and flash
As your feel your body respond so tight
This rapid rage and hate so brutish and clear
Lancing towards all in sight a black gift
Uncontrolled aggression running hellbound
Do you fight it, or smile and enjoy?
- COMMENTS
Subbymaybeover 10 years agoYou of course know I understand this completely and feel my own form(s) of rage....about something or another.
miss u....and you know I luv the "or smile and enjoy it" ;)
UnderYourSpellover 10 years agoPowerful piece although I don't get this line unless it's a typo ..... 'As your feel your body respond so tight'. Agree with the 'So well' of previous comments
Angelineover 10 years agoYou conjure an all but nuclear blind rage and then add humanity at the end when you question it and maybe even welcome it. Powerful writing.
I think I agree with Tod about the "so well" only because "well" is a blah kind of word to me and something more meaningful, maybe something like "complete" would give you more there.
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todski28over 10 years agoReading this was the phrase
"So well" so close together. Nice look at one of the darker emotions, leaving a contemplative ending on a subject matter thag is individually different is IMHO a nice way to end it. I like the final two lines
