- Non-Erotic Poetry
- Glass Roses and Laughter
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Glass Roses and Laughter
On this night I have
lost my heart to another's
hands.
I pray to any that can
let fate treat us gently.
We both need so
light a touch.
For like glass roses are
we both.
** **
The sound of her laughter fills
my mind to drive out the shadows.
The walls are breached and all
darkness flees. My eyes are
filled with her face.
My heart is tearing at my
chest. A lump of terror in
in my throat, there to stay
forever.
My arms tremble to be around
her, and my hands shake to touch
her skin. Tonight I have but one
wish in this world. Let last night
not be a dream.
Let me feel her lips on mine.
- COMMENTS
greenmountaineeralmost 10 years agoThis is beautiful, using common language effectively, although I agree with 1201 about "we both." It felt contrived.
twelveoonealmost 10 years agothough it might be one poem, now the rest, some suggestions
"For like glass roses are we both." Comes off as an affectation, how is
for we both are like glass roses, now why like glass, give at least a hint.
A lump of terror in in my throat, there to stay forever.
This is minor, but your throat is part of you. Why not here instead of there? "here" would be more immediate. This is just some of the crap you have to think about.
5ed anyway
