- Non-Erotic Poetry
- Lullaby
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The smoke and ash voice from your Marlboro mouth
Rumbles in your chest like a distant storm beneath my ear.
Your heartbeat, rhythmic confirmation of life,
Beats against my cheek,
Lulling me.
The rise and fall of your breathing,
Rocks me like a wave as I drift into dreaming.
For so long now your body has been for me, the sweetest lullaby.
- COMMENTS
Amyfriendover 16 years agoof sheer brilliance. Terrific created images. You've got talent girl. But maybe you could have dropped the last line completely.
sackover 16 years agoThe last line is a little weak, perhaps you could leave a space and make "The sweetest lullaby" a line unto itself. Otherwise, quite cogent and well written. Bravo!
GuiltyPleasureover 16 years agoNice, I particularly like the opening line ....
...."The smoke and ash voice from your Marlboro mouth"... it grabs the attention and sets the scene right away.
Tess
wildsweetoneover 16 years agoi mentioned this poem in the New Poem Review thread in the Poetry Forum. please feel free to come along and join in with other poets. the 50% temperature rating i've given you is so that it does not affect future temp ratings. - wildsweetone.
