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we had our Pal in the desert
we prayed to Him
we were scolding him
we were not His
chosen people
we were His only one
you had your own Gods
and you and you and you
but you liked ours
and He liked you such a tease
once He got promoted
you
in His name
persecute us
wh,
2008-06-03
- COMMENTS
normal jeanover 8 years agothat your poetry is "pared down". Like you told me, poetry is more effective without the author's BS and you certainly do not litter your work with opinion or abstract judgement. The poem made me think....I need more of that
legerdemerover 8 years agoLight and heavy at the same time. And it reminded me of Michener's The Source - perhaps because his book put that part of history in perspective for me. Your poem does it in such a more punchy, more effective way - not to mention with many fewer words (LOL).
I'm so glad Todski chose to highlight your poem.
~A tribeswoman.
wakingDownover 8 years agoIt certainly is a good one, and one I'll be reading again a few times. It really gets the gears turning over quite a bit, and makes me stop to consider. Well done.
todski28over 8 years agois too pared back for me to get a sense of it, which is readers fault, but this, this is some powerful thought provoking reading Senna!
