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Click hereI'd rope a river for you.
If you wanted me to.
To draw the banks closer to each others side.
Arm in arm with bowed chest pride.
I'll rope the moon and bring it to you.
The glow of its light would be dim next to you.
The big oval pearl of the moon.
But I put it back for you had not the room...
for a big oval moon.
I'll rope the wind and bring it to you.
The coolness it brings when passions blew.
The warmness of touch caressed by a breeze.
I'd rope it if it would make you pleased.
I'd rope you and bring you to me.
with wrapping rope of binding thee.
Hold you close and breath a kiss.
fondel here and touch and twist.
I'd rope the sun and bring it to you.
Its heat would melt next to your passion flame blue.
Your warm heart and heated desires.
The flaming of the two fires.
I'd have to put it back for rest of the world.
But I'd rope it for you girl.
When somebody reads a submission they find things wrong. When they find that perhaps they can lend a helpful hint or two. Be sure you take the same amount of care as you are so happily telling the person what's wrong.
In telling them what's right.Take the effort you use to criticize spend the same time on being complimetary also.
Once again Art your talent excels in imagination...
felt a bit forced here and an apostrophe or two bit you (other's in line 3). I think if you got away from rhyming couplets and went with a less restrictive rhyme scheme, it will feel less forced. I like the roping of the wind and sun, the images there. Overall pretty good. and watch that punctuation... : )
jim : )