- Erotic Poetry
- Soulful Eyes
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She looks at him with soulful eyes that scream,
And she will muse on hopes that he'll desist
Or find a path where there's more give; she'll twist
In winds that bend with forces, which don't seem
The stuff that gentlemen explore within
Her compass of experience. She slides
Away from usage, soldered to her skin,
Wanting another world that coincides
With everything her heart would advocate:
Not leashed to every bidding she's obeyed;
Not subtle like the ways that he'd dictate
A clear way through. So, let her now renege
and build an impasse that will end the dream;
Meantime, she looks with soulful eyes that scream.
- COMMENTS
LadyGenevieveabout 13 years agoI am always fascinated by the story hidden in someone's eyes. You created an eloquent artistic journey.
buttersabout 13 years agoAngie's right about your line-breaks and enjambments, SO - this runs on smoothly. i liked the message these lines develop, and especially the phrase 'soldered to her skin'
She slides
Away from usage, soldered to her skin,
Wanting another world that coincides
With everything her heart would advocate
I do share UYS's small concern about 'soulful eyes that scream' - it feels a slight contradiction in terms
UnderYourSpellabout 13 years agoyou can always be relied upon to write beautiful sonnets, not sure about soulful eyes screaming though. I would have thought a soulful eye was quiet and passive
Angelineabout 13 years agoSuch a beautiful sonnet, so lyrical and fluid. You really understand how to enjamb lines for the best effect. Easy five. :-)
