- Non-Erotic Poetry
- Strait jacked
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Sometimes, for no reason sadness
wraps me like a straitjacket
squeezes my chest, chokes the breath
from my lungs in short, shallow gasps
At first I struggle to escape
its grip but it tightens
like a Chinese bamboo finger puzzle
so I straighten up and breathe deep
Only to feel the waters rise up
from the well of my heart
spill out of eyes, nose and mouth
with waves of spasmodic strangled sobs
I cry for mercy, mercy on my soul
not even knowing what I’ve done
to deserve this cold
shoulder from the gods
if they’re even there
and if so, even care
about one more mere mortal
shuffling off his coil
- COMMENTS
Christina O. Leighover 19 years agoSometimes, for no reason sadness
wraps me like a straitjacket
squeezes my chest, chokes the breath
from my lungs in short, shallow gasps
Prehaps:
Sometimes, for no reason
sadness wraps me like a strait jacket-only thing I noticed
that took away from the nice flow.
But, it really pulled me in. I thought it was a GREAT title. This is definitely fabulous work with wonderful choice of words. Filled with emotions, drawing me in....suffocating pain!!
WickedEveover 19 years agoSometimes, for no reason sadness
wraps me like a straitjacket
Consider moving sadness down to the beginning of the next line.
Good poem.
LilDarlinover 19 years agoWhat a poem. The sadness just reaches out and grabs ya.. Loved the imagery. So deep this poem. Can feel it all around you. The emotion shown here is just overwhelming.
*only to feel the waters rise up
from the well of my soul*
outstanding.. loved this line~~!!
Keep'm coming~~!!
