The Quarry

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Over barbed wire
thru biting blackberry  brush
we rush
to our private playground

First to the point
a 30 foot plunge into the shimmering aquamarine below
the braver drop 40 and head first
breaking the sun warmed surface
driving in to the chilled depths
surfacing invigorated and alive

Next to the beach
reached by scaling sheer rock faced walls
a hundred foot drop
don’t look down
steady hands, sure feet
you need large stones to make it

Shaved gray granite tables
await at the beach
spreading ourselves upon them
we serve ourselves to the rays
naked as jaybirds
and twice as boisterous

An occasional dip to refresh
perhaps a trip to the other side
100 yards and out
scurry up the slope to Odin’s den
burrowed into the side

they say gay guys bring young boys here
“hey, I’m a young guy”
urban legend or
 truth stranger than fiction
never found out
didn’t want to

Living myths
Making memories
Days of exploration and daring do
friends fun and sun
Enough
to last a lifetime

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WickedEveWickedEvealmost 20 years ago
stanza

I think this stanza puts a bump in the poetic road:

they say gay guys bring young boys here

?hey, I?m a young guy?

urban legend or

truth stranger than fiction

never found out

didn?t want to

It's going pretty smooth until I get to the above stanza that seems to have an "added in" feel when reading it. I've written poems about places and events very familiar to me and I want to tell it all. But when I reread the poem, I realize that to make it better I need to cut away some of the excess.

fawniefawniealmost 20 years ago
i'll let the pros help u edit!..

and just tell you its an enjoyable read.xo

tarablackwood22tarablackwood22almost 20 years ago
Overall...

....this is excellent. I agree with Ang...one more run through and edit to smooth would have helped, but the images and phrasings are strong.

AngelineAngelinealmost 20 years ago
Evocative

I think it could use some editing, there are some parts that seem more about explaining than purely poetic to my ear, but don't get me wrong--I think the poem is really really good. It has such sense of place, and envisioning that day with your words paints a picture of paradise. :)

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