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Click herePowerful.
Gripping.
Yet flat and
and plain.
Pulling.
Strong.
Yet at times weak
and sad.
Moving.
Loving.
Yet passionate
and kind.
No dimension.
Just there silent,
but speaks so much.
Can bring a nation
to their knees.
Or cure a broken
heart.
Separates lovers
or brings them to tears.
Delivers news
to everyone.
They hold your attention.
Play with your
mind
and senses.
Make you feel everything
or nothing at all.
The power behind
flat, black words
we construct.
Watch what we write.
Others will see.
Will know.
Will feel.
Because in the end,
the fault of our
black penned words
are the cause
for many sufferings,
and yet...
Many joys.
You might consider changing one or two of the 'Yet's.
You are growing, and (IMHO) improving.
DC:
It says all that needs to be said about the written word. Thank You. Ronnie W.
Power that can be used for good or bad, or seen with the same differences. Nice job.
Damn, you're getting good! So good you've put me into editor mode. The build up seems a bit too long; I was wondering, where are we going with this. But it's good enough to keep my attention. I like what you say but it could be tightened up a bit. Tell you what I'll do - first, I'll get a good night's sleep, then I'll send you suggestions for your consideration later this afternoon. A quick look and I was thinking those first 3 stanzas could be combined, then there are a few points that could be cut here and there; I'll play with it and get back to you later.