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Click here"Hey boys, Beers at my place." Jo yelled as the Miller boys whistled and cheered. Angel walking toward Jo's car. "Come on get in." Jo smiled at Angel already knowing Angel wasn't about to ride back with the guys in the van.
"Hey text Alex and let him know were own our way home." Jo smiled at her. Angel glanced up from putting on her seat belt and nodded before fixing her hair to hide her hearing implant.
Well written and rounded characters! Was a real pleasure to read! 6 stars if you had voting on!
Very good story so far. The characters and story grow on you. With few exceptions, all characters are mature, well grounded, and accept others for who they are and not what they would like them to be. They are emotionally stable, nonjudgmental and open minded. They are freely willing to sacrifice for each other and treat each other as equals. Personally, I prefer these fictional characters to real humans.
You need an editor that can actually edit! Still too many grammar, vocabulary and spelling errors. Don't get me wrong I love the story, my OCD drives me crazy with all the mental corrections!! LOL
I see that you stopped writing a few years ago. That is too bad as you have real talent, and I hope you publish more stories here.
But I do strongly encourage you to get an Editor. It would would help immencely with the reading of your stories.
Also, since you do bounce around in time a great deal, I suggest at the beginning of each chapter putting in the date notation. It can get confusing and a pain to have to jump between chapters to remember where you are in time.
Anyway, thank you for sharing, I love the story, the characters and what you've done. Stay safe.