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Click here"What shall we watch?" she asked.
I brought the planner up and we selected an old film we liked and I clicked on the channel, we were so relaxed as we lay back to enjoy it. I looked over at Jen and Dad, His hand on her leg, her hand round his neck, I grinned as Mums hand came down onto my shoulder and I raised mine to hold hers.
What a perfect evening after yesterday.
- COMMENTS
Anonymousabout 4 years agoThey called an ambulance and went to the hospital for a hand wound. Honestly that's the part of the story that blew me away the most. Otherwise it was fun.
Anonymousover 7 years agostopped dead at the reference to when they were kids! total and instant removal from the fantasy. nice writing up until then but i cannot go on after that one reference, just freaked me out.
Anonymousover 9 years agoI thought your story was well written, but hoped it was just the first chapter. HS, I think there is a lot more you can add to this story. The characters are interesting and the family dynamic is good whether brother and sister explore alone, or the parents get involved too. Please don't stop here! And don't let one grumbly American reader turn you off from writing! I am an American reader who enjoys stories written by authors from all over the world. Again, please don't let one reader stop you.
rightbankalmost 10 years agoEnglish did not originate in the colonies. it came over from the U.K. with the british who colonized the new world. French, germans, Italians, and native americans also contributed to the evolution of the language and it has continued to evolve and transform to this day. there are writers from Canada, Australia, great Britain, the states, and many other "English" speaking countries who contribute on this site. They should all be welcome. And, we should all embrace the many differences and be grateful for and celebrate the regional colloquialisms. If your personal variation of English happens to be different from the author, get over it, learn from it, and be grateful we have another author willing to write stories for us to read.
HunterShamblesalmost 10 years agoAuthorWow, sorry I published this, I thought it was a good story and developed well. Thanks for your comments, all of them really. I don't think there's anything else I can or want to do with these charactors now. Again thank you. Sorry I caused such a storm in a teacup.
HS
