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Click hereIt chanced that Jeremy, on discovering that his beloved Janice was not as forthcoming in bed as she had been before they married, tried to return to the bosom of Butter, only to be told that he had been superseded -- although not by whom - and would best content himself with Janice.
Butter, who was not normally given to crude language, put it to Jeremy that he should, "Fuck off," because she had found someone more adjusted to her needs.
Butter and Grey produced one more child whom they named Mint.
"Ignore the comments about what you should have done. You wrote a story that was about love with a bit of porn thrown in, making it sexy, but not debauched. There's a place for both, but you don't have to have triple penetration in every story. It was lovely, I enjoyed it and got a little tingle that was nice, very nice."
it's always good to read bad and god criticism, then challenge you're self if you feel it's right then go for it..
I like you're writing styles..
BUT AT LEAST THEY WERE NOT NAMED AFTER VEGETABLES....THOSE KIDS AND THE DOG ALONG WITH THE BENCH KEEP TURNING UP AND NO WOMAN I HAVE EVER KNOW SHOUTS OUT WITH don't...I don't want to...its torment...no darling don't make me...
Ignore the comments about what you should have done. You wrote a story that was about love with a bit of porn thrown in, making it sexy, but not debauched. There's a place for both, but you don't have to have triple penetration in every story. It was lovely, I enjoyed it and got a little tingle that was nice, very nice.
You need to start faster and keep the action going and more ways of doing it. She should spend more time nude with him being able to take her from any opening. he should also use her anus as a new experience for her.