Try the free LITEROTICA WEBCAMS!

All Comments on 'A Joyful Belonging'

by Sappholovers

Sort by:
Newest FirstOldest First
  • 1 Comment
WickedEveWickedEveabout 20 years ago
bluuuurrrriiiing

There is some good writing in areas of this poem. :)

I want to make a small suggestion, though.

It's about this part:

Them on Us

Blurring .... Bluuuurrrrrrrrrrrrriiing

Blurring lines of combinations

Have you considered:

Them on Us

Blurring

Blurring lines of combinations

It looks and sounds better that way, at least, to me.

Anonymous
Our Comments Policy is available in the Lit FAQ
Login
Post as:
Anonymous
Login