All Comments on 'Still Life Series'

I very much liked your poem. The imagery is good, and the metaphors rich. I would like to see some concrete material here though. Abstraction is great, but eroticism needs some grounding in physicality to me?...

I can see that you have a terrific grasp of metaphor, style. Your work reads like the hundreds of poems I see when I go online and read poetry in ezines that publish one style of poetry....

You have succumbed to that ubershort line syndrome. It disrupts whatever flow you had going and sterillizes the work. It is only my opinion, but the 2 and 3 word "lines" do little for a poem.

Once again, I admire your tenacity to have your lines just so, but the result reads as severely over-edited/ it makes the poem feel cut and cleansed, void of the passion it takes for *me* to thoroughly enjoy a poem.

I will continue to read you because one day you will probably just let go and spill something beautiful all over the place :)