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by SweetOblivion

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greenmountaineergreenmountaineerover 7 years ago

Not my kind of fetish, S.O., but I always read your poems (I almost wrote "stuff," perhaps more appropriate, given the narrative) because of the thought and skill you bring to each.

I like the beat on the first syllable in the nasty adjective you begin with. Its sound and image set the tone from the get go. I wonder if a few more lines beginning like that may have enhanced that effect.

On the the other hand, I might have finished with

"Or insist upon as your valentine." for a softer ending.

That may be a quibble, but I believe sounds and images are often subliminal.

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I enjoy caring relationships with quiet, polite, women with open minds and good senses of humour, be it in a longer-term arrangement or just a one off. If you are up for it, I will engage in daddy-ply, d/s play, impact play and other sensual games. Definitely not into hur...