All Comments on 'Speed of the Sound of Loneliness Ch. 01'

This is an excellent beginning to what I expect to be a multi-chapter blockbuster. Please please continue.

First off the wife is cheating on him-- or was for a LOOOOOOOONG time before she threw him out.

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I love this story so far... but the very beginning ias so off the wall that I could not get past it for awhile. For example

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the wife .... secretly gets a Job Never hints about how unhappy she has been... then tells her parents and HIS parents... THEN springs a surprise actual Petition for Divorce on him... and she says "Don't get all bent out of shape, Jack......."

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and he says Nothing?? Someone IS bent out of shape but its NOT him.

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SECOND.... over the next 3 months this Guy is NOT the least bit curious as to what the fuck happened? I mean come on folks... <b> the wife has told HIS parents and the kids THEY are getting a divorce But No one calls him?!?!?!!?

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then over the next 3 months he never even Tries to talk to ANYONE in his family ....the kids.... or Her family? Isnt he the least bit curious as to what the fuck happened? </b>

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The rest of it is OK.... and the conversation with Molly is predictable

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I don't want your money despite what my lawyer tells me. We'll split the savings

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This is an excellent start to what appears to be very interesting cycle of many steps to a man who was in a rut and has been given an opportunity to grow as I see the premise of the story developing.

I look forward to future presentations.

Now that I think about it... I dont get the phone conversation at all. Molly calls him up.... and he agrees with meet with her. Then he PROUDLY thinks he was cold to her?... when he ends the phone call with <i> "OK ... see you at seven thirty at Bruno's. Bye... </i>

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HUH?!?!?

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how is saying "OK sure lets met at Bruno's... BYE" a cold phone call?

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I mean why doesnt he say to her... <b>No I dont wnat to met with you. Milly I am sorry if I made your life so unhappy and you so miserable but you gave no warning at all. Not a clue. So fuck off Molly and drop dead...

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Good So Far:

I Agree with Harryinva, I have alot of questions and looking forword to the rest of the story. Did her boyfriend spend all her money yet?

Regards: Bill

I really liked how this story started. He gets blindsided and then life changes. I am looking forward to reading the next sections.

I am looking foreward to see where the writer is taking us.

I do not agree with HarryinVA, he did speak to Molly a couple of times over three months, he did speak with his children a couple of time a month. I believe the issue here is simply that she was right about not or no longer talking to each other, having become just comfortable with each other and over time having fallen out of love.

She kept telling him in a montone way he was a useless asshole, while he was trying to figure out what he was going to do, then he figured he should say something but had no idea what to say, so he never said a word and walked out. Yes, he was schocked and upset with Molly and the impending divorce but he had not tried to see her in three months and although having talked to her a couple of times

over the phone, wasn't sure he should go and see how she was doing ... Even though, after the relieve of the first days for not having to watch her programs, not having to ask for permission to drink/eat what he wanted, he did not sleep well with his mind at full speed and with weird thoughts and in a gordian knot... It simply says he accepted the situation for what is was and realized that he had to make the best of it.

Unless I failed to read it there was not even a hint of Molly having or having had an affair, so HarryinVA just assumed there had to be a lover. Let us just asumme that in the concept of the story is was not all that important to go in many unneccassry details and wait for the further development by the author. Hopefully not too long a wait.

The writing is excellent.

G.Belgium

I agree with the poster that mentioned that there was no hint that Molly was having an affair - for all we know she's menopausal. OR what if Molly was trying desperately to shake up her husband's routine or what had become a monotonous marriage and life? People get in a rut - they get up in the morning, work, eat, watch TV, go to sleep, then start over again until they die...

These people don't really talk anymore, the marriage is stale. It's basically a comfortable routine until one day they ask themselves is this all there is??? I am not assuming for one minute that this is just a cheating wife story. I believe this story goes deeper...as it is, this author has hooked me into the story and I can't wait for more. Thank you, author, for the meaty story, something that has a plot. I appreciate it VERY much.

beginning. well written. hope the next chapters are as entertaining. have an idea where you are headed, but will wait with everyone else in anticipation. your fan always, wetapap

John Prine will be tickled you used his song title, although your story is coming along a bit lighter than the song. Good job.

Sure Molly could be menopausal... but she DID not lead up to it. Its one thing to shake things up... to get counselling... or to even have a trial seperation. But instead DEMANED -- not asked -- for a divorce.

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as for that BELGIUM poster... Go back and read the story

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Please find a passage where he says He has seen Molly ONE time since he was kicked out .

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he has not talked ot his kids... he has not talked to his own parens or hers. Surely his own Momn or dad would call him up and say.... what is going in your life? how are you handling this?...

This has the all the earmarks of the beginning of an interesting story. I await Chapter 2. What will Molly think of the new him?! RAG

<p>On one hand I think the start is pretty good for an opening story. It did something, it made me curious to see what part two would have</p>

<p>But on the other hand it did open alot of plot holes that Harry pointed out that I saw as well:</p>

<p>- Why didn't anyone say anything to him about the divorce. Family, friends, kids? No one either before or after the impending divorce. Why is no one checking up on him? Why is everyone in their family leaving him to fend for himself? That seems really odd, like they had no friends other than each other.</p>

<p>- I like meekness, but the main character redefines the role. The wife throws him out, but he didn't really seem to fight it. Kinda sat back and accepted it after 30 years of marriage. That seems kinda weird. It might be explained in part two (or three even) but he seemed to take it all in stride for such a life changing decision</p>

<p>- He's not seen his doctor in a whle and when he does go in for a check up the doctor tears him a new one? Why? Does he have a history of ducking the doctor? Ignoring advice? What? Most doctors, specially one in their 30's, are more helpful than spiteful, but this guy seems to be on a short leash, I'm just curious why he would be</p>

<p>- For the most part the husband, if I guess correctly has been divorced an estimated 7 months (4 months after she threw him out he went to the doctor and then he took 3 months to drop to under 180lbs for a total of 7 months) most <i>uncontested</i> divorces take under 6 months, and this guy seems to not be contesting, I guess I'm kinda wondering why they are still "working" on the divorce? I guess it will be in part two? I say that based on the way this story ended.</p>

<p>- Why the fond memorys for someone who coldly threw him out after 30 years? I mean she feeds him one Saturday morning, then basically said "Get out". Then 7 months later he basically can't wait to see her again. Why? </p>

<p>If you choose to have them work it out, I hope you've written a way for us to like the wife again. Right now she's pretty unlikeable and having them get back together should feel it happened because it was the right thing. But I have faith that you'll do that (^_^)</p>

-Risq

Original start to very interesting story. Most stories here are "same old, same old". but this one is ,at least a little different and interesting. She is as others have said, unbelievably cold and impersonal in her dictate about the divorce.--no discussion, just bang- get out! In addition, she informs the whole family about her unilateral decision before she tells hubby about the divorce. A little reminiscent of Nici's story He, on the other hand just walks out and asks no questions. Apparently communicates with noone but does go out and improve his health and his job. Fascinating start to what appears to be a very interesting innovative story. Can't wait for chapter 2

60 year old George

Original start to very interesting story. Most stories here are "same old, same old". but this one is ,at least a little different and interesting. She is as others have said, unbelievably cold and impersonal in her dictate about the divorce.--no discussion, just bang- get out! In addition, she informs the whole family about her unilateral decision before she tells hubby about the divorce. A little reminiscent of Nici's story He, on the other hand just walks out and asks no questions. Apparently communicates with noone but does go out and improve his health and his job. Fascinating start to what appears to be a very interesting innovative story. Can't wait for chapter 2

60 year old George

I dont see some of the stuff people are complaining about wrt plot holes and inconsistencies. I just read the story as the author not bothering to go into detail about all the family/friend interactions during and after the divorce, not that nobody spoke to the husband. If the author didnt intend the children/friends/relatives/etc to play a roll in the story, there is no reason why he should have spelled out their conversations either. Maybe I missed something but the only thing I saw in the story about this type interaction was the mention that the husband spoke to the kids (grown children at that) at least weekly and has spoken to his ex a few times. I must have missed the part where he told us that nobody talked to the husband. <p><p>

Even if I did miss something about the family, its still a good story and way too soon to jump to some of the conclusions being reached imo. I have seen nothing to indicate that the husband is going to go crawling back to the ex or even that she wants that. I have seen nothing saying that he wanted to take the wife back or that he even regrets that she dumped him. I have seen nothing about why the guy should bother fighting the divorce or trying to talk his wife out of it. She dumped him without a second thought and didnt give a crap about his feelings while doing it. If they were just drifting at this point why is he supposed to move heaven and earth to stay with her? I didnt see anything about the wife screwing around on him before she asked for the divorce either. <p><p>

Even with all the stuff I didnt see that others did, I still thought it was a good story and Im eagerly looking forward to the next chapters. Thanks for writing.

I really wonder about the readers of this forum. They try to over analyze everything. This is a sight which presents erotic FICTION for the readers pleasure. Just sit back and enjoy the writers presentation, which in the case of this story is entertaining and well written, and don't worry about the possible inconsistencies. You can, if you look carefully, find inconsistencies even in the classics.

Any story that grabs my attention and holds it which this did I like. Hope the rest is soon. Thanks for your effort!

1st off you are appreciated and looked forward to. This was another advance on your skills shown.<P>

You project a shy likability for your hero and it works for me.<P>

She isn't the important character thus far so details haven't been that important. I am sure that as this unfolds we will see that she has had second thoughts but he isn't about to revisit the scene of the accident or the driver under anything but his considered thought and conditions.<P>

Even then, I believe she is out of sunshine and in her own quagmire. She could have discussed her frame of mind long ago but chose ambush instead.

Thanks Author - onward with the consequences - please!

With Very High Regard

Interesting what a correct diet, some exercise, and reduction in stress will accomplish. Also interesting that Jack hasn't had ANY sex yet with his new bod. I suspect that will be corrected shortly...

I will be disappointed if selfish Molly is in his future. She kicked Jack to the curb for her benefit, not his.

depending on if you are listening or talking. TK U MLJ LV NV

Shame on me. My loss. I enjoy the intertwining of commerce with personal rehab. There is a question as to how a man could be a demon of efficiency at work & slovenly in his personal life but I suppose we're all mixed bags. I concur with previous commentators in praising this initial installment.

You know I seem to remember that name. And I'm I thinking he might have done the song, There's a hole in daddy's arm thats were the money goes. But no matter what your inspiration. I really like the story. It's a 5.

one looks for another egress and exit, TK U MLJ LV NV

There is no fucking way I would leave the house! If she wants to leave let her, but why should he have to leave?

So he’s gone a little to seed. She isn’t described, but I would hazard a guess that she won’t be modeling for Playboy anytime soon! And if she has a problem with their marriage, she can’t TALK to him before divorce? She’s obviously been dissatisfied long enough to see a lawyer, get divorce papers prepared and tell the family, but she couldn’t say anything to him?

And the parents and kids knew and couldn’t tell him? I understand HER parents keeping her secret, but HIS parents? And THEIR kids?!

Not to pick nits, but you call Phil Tupper the Controller. Unless I’m off-base (not unusual!), I believe his position is called the Comptroller, a management level position responsible for supervising the quality of accounting and financial reporting of an organization.

Yes, but the fiction presumes an underlying reality, that we as readers have a right to expect the story to conform to.

We therefore have every right to question the author when we feel the story doesn’t make sense.

John Prine DID write “Sam Stone”, which has the lyrics, “There's a hole in daddy's arm where all the money goes".

Ah, so far so good.

Onward to Ch. 02!

Toyota, while having factories in America, is NOT and American company

Wow, great turnaround for him post-Molly!!

Best he keeps away from her