All Comments on 'The Girl Beneath the Skin'

It was a really good touching story, plus it was damn sexy.

Not just a rush to the sex. Character development, an actual story line, antagonists, protagonists, my god, this is actually erotic Literature. A pleasure to read. Hope to see more like this.

I like mind control stories but find emotional sadism a real turn-off, so a lot of MC stories really don't work for me. It's such a joy to find stories like this that avoid that cruelty trap and let me genuinely like the protagonists.

I don't usually enjoy the mind control stories. I'm not sure why I decided to read this one, but BOY AM I GLAD I DID!. Thanks for a great read, a great concept, and some wonderful entertainment.

A wonderful story populated with credible folk. If this is the result after your 2-1/2 year absence from publishing on Literotica, then all I can say is "Encore!". A lovely story that had me enthralled.

One to stand alone in any genre!!!

Wow!

excellent!

I am thoroughly astonished. I've never read a mind control story like that before... as goofy as this may sound, I actually teared up a bit when I realized what was going on. Thank you.

What a wonderful, and highly romantic, story! It has a certain sweetness and near-innocence one doesn't expect to find in MC stories, and yet it's also red hot. I could easily see why Tim was so aroused. Fine work! Thank you.

You went to the core of the beauty of humanity and eroticism at the same time. I'll be bookmarking this when I need to be reminded about the world we live in. Thank you for giving this to us.

Thank you for this.

i surly like mc stories, but yours has a new edge and i realy liked it.

hoop to read more

because there is no 6. Thanks!

This is the first of your postings that I have read.It's that I don't usually read mind control stories.I was very drawn in to the story, and realized just how good of a story line that you have created, and how well you have written the work.I just wanted to say thank you for the well put together work....Rich

I agree it is MORE THAN a 5. Much more. Great effort! !

Absolutely the best story on the site. I'm printing it off for my wife. Just Beautiful!

That was probably one of the best stories I've ever read in my whole life, and I read romances and war novels and shit! You have a talent, my friend. If I can write just one story like this, i could die happ...let me not finish that. Keep up the good work!

This is a great history, its really hearth touching and erotic at the same time, short and perfect, objetive acomplish.

Im sharing this with my girl as soon as I get married, truly a remarcable tale. Congratulations.

... incredible story.

I have not read any other story that combines all these elements so perfectly.

Beauty, humanity, love, pure erotic, a passion literally beyond consciousness!

Amazing!!!

I've been reading stories on this site for years, but I've never left feedback before. Frickin awesome story man. Really, that was quite good. It could be a movie or something. Obviously, you'd have to make it longer, but it was that good. Really high caliber stuff there.

After going through lots of somewhat degrading stories on this site, it was nice to read something positive like this one. I actually shed a few tears. Very well written. Wish there were more like them.

Hands down the best story I've read on this site! Thank you for sharing it!!

... the most sincere and well-composed novella I've ever had the impossible pleasure of reading. Blacknight99, you have an incredible gift for writing, and I would be more than ecstatic to see this become a full-fledged book. I love erotic stories, especially from literotica.com, but there are ever so few that I deem worth reading outside of the safety of my home, for fear of scorn or judgemental glares; but this... this story, I would gladly share with strangers, just to pass along the perfect beauty. I wish you good luck with your life, so that you may live to witness the future of your own career... in writing, perhaps. :D

-Dylan

I am so very glad I decided to take a chance on this beautiful story. You should be proud of this effort. Like the title of my comment said, heartwarming and arousing. I'm a relative newcomer to Lit but I hope I find more treasures like this one.

Maddie

Wow, this story was amazing. It was so sweet and so erotic at the same time. Definitely my favorite, and I have read a lot of stories on this site. Also, it made me feel better about myself: often I am very self-critical about my appearance and forget that its the "girl beneath the skin" that really matters. Thanks for sharing this wonderful story!

One of the most compassionate, heart-warming stories I've ever read. And very hot. My hat's off to you, sir! (or maam.)

Wow that was such and incredible story, such a beautiful narrative keep it up!

I have been coming to this sight for a number of years now. I am a single guy ookoing for love and have no interest in one night stands. I am a true romantic at heart. Most of the writers here want to produce copious amounts of cumm. There are a few who what to touch the soul first and then wee what happens. I prefere to read stories like this one that touch the soul and are for the romantic rather than the person seeking a quick jerk-off. Great story , great characters and hot sex!

A WONDERFUL story. Very few writers on this site write a story worthy of the time spent reading it.

Originality: 5/5

Sexuality: 5/5

Visualiations: 10/5

Overall: 8/5

This is one of the best stories I have read on this site. I even had a tear in my eye at the end of the story. I can't wait to read more of your stories!

I have over looked this story many times but tonight I just had to read it. My thoughts are: This is one of the most feel good stories I have read in some time. It is not a "get off" story but one of compassion and love. Makes for very good reading. Thank you. M

this is the best story i've read on literotica... ever.

what... the... fuck. Was the first thought that came to mind. How on earth... did something like this ever become written? I don't even see how it's possible that a human being could write such art, this must be a direct message from some super higher power, I don't know, but I don't think I've ever read anything this good before.

My experience in reading this story went through a few different phases. The first was when I clicked on the story, and I'll admit I was kinda hoping for some quick 'get off' material.

First, I was sucked in by the character development. Wow, holy shit, we are dealing with REAL people in this story, it's like they have REAL feelings and a realistic thought process. I became attached to both of the characters from the onset.

Secondly, during the whole dinner, and she put the eye dropper in HIS drink, that through me for a real spin, I was just thinking she was going to take something for her self (maybe something she thought would make her horny or something), but wow... that proceeding bit of story, made me no less feel that *I* was drug tripping. I was just thinking wtf... as things rather turned upside down; I did kinda worry for a split second that her actions were going to turn malicious, but then when she mentioned MC stories? ...

This was really interesting, because it's similar to, what we call 'breaking the fourth wall'. Not completely, but it was a surprise reading the story and all of a sudden a finger was pointed at us readers (of course, actively reading a MC story). I have read other stories that referred to LIT in the actual story, but this managed it quite different, it was like someone pointed a finger at me when I least expected it; very, very well played.

Sex was good... I really loved the part when she was taking her clothes off. I mean, come on, we are reading a story here, we have to imagine it as it is, but seeing how things weren't being explicitly defined like in most stories, but it was rather more like... well, it's hard to explain here, but I really like how you did it.

Other than that... it was really good. Looking back, I kinda wished it was a longer story... I'd surely love to hear some stories of them going forward and selling great things and doing good stuff, I dunno, but anyway, very good work.

how I ended up reading a mind control story, which never seemed to interest me, but I'm glad I did. This story was wonderful, sensuous, loving, sexual,and left the reader with a warm feeling that such people actually could exist in this world. What a guy. What a gal. You did good author, really good. Enough said. ML

I read your new story (Addicted Natural) and enjoyed it very much, so I went back to your story list to see what other gems might be lurking there. Imagine my surprise to find one of my very favorite Literotica stories of all time waiting for me to read again. I'm very glad to find it again, too. Thanks.

Fantastic, I cannot believe how much detail you put into the story its the best story i've ever read. Keep up the EXCELLENT writing 10/10

My favorite story on this whole site! Beautiful job!! :D

Great story well written; going read some more of your stories !

that was a fuckin good read you are a very talented writer and this story is one fuckin good one. i love the originality and how one should look inside someone because it doesn't matter if someone is pretty or ugly it's about the person's personality and how you feel toward them and how they are important to you. I love the story.

5/5 i'm gob smacked this is by far the best story i read on the site. Amazing, it's been said must be repeated, mate fucking good job...

Please God, if you aren't already selling your own books, then get busy contacting publishers! Honestly, this is my first time here and I was looking for what everyone looks for from erotic lit, and after reading a dozen and being utterly bored, I picked a topic I don't care about and spun the

wheel, and got this amazing story! I hadn't even intended to return to the site, but now I actually have a favorite in my file and a bunch more stories from you to read. I'd buy your book at Barnes & Noble! I'm not ashamed of wanting an erotic fix now & again, but I don't exactly shout about it. However, I will be referring friends to your works and will unabashedly tell everyone that I found them on Literotica.com.

This story brought tears to my eyes it was written so beautifully, and I am a committed male porn hound!!

You are good writer !

LUST and LOVE , LOVE will prevail..

you are good. Keep it up!

You are obviously a talented and skilled writer, but what impressed me the most was your understanding of the romantic side of life. Most stories are devoid of any real emotional content, but you were able to weave it into both characters psyches. There is romance all around us in real life, but some people are not able to understand it, and pass it by.

Well done!

This story is far superior as a love story than other stories on the website. So few stories posted at Literotica can also be posted on other non-sexual websites and still be one of the best - impressive.

While I realize it does not have as much sex as most would like (the reason they come to the website) - the message of the person who is beneath the skin is a deep message. You brought new meaning to the phrase that "Beauty is only skin deep."

Thank you for taking the effort to post this story.

It is not often one reads a story of this depth and intensity.

A full five stars.

The best way for me to describe what I think of this story is for me to keep it simple and say, "Thank you."

This is the first time I have felt the need to comment....well done...great story.

Wow,

You have done a wonderful thing in this story. Not only have you brought back chivalry and decency to a relationship but then you go and have the hero and heroine become legitimate. In all of the stories that I read very seldom do I see one so well written. The story was magic. I say that about a very few. Ask the authors that submit to me for editing. Continue with these two please- their adventures in the world of business could take them very far.

Hey Ill be the first one to admit I read a lot of stories online, most of which are written by 17yr olds. But you.... Wow. This is the first time Ive WANTED to comment. Your story was brilliant. I hope you continue and write another.

Thank you for posting your story.

-Aeonsun

After several years reading this site I didn't find anything else I wanted to read on here and turned to Mind Control, which I have avoided as I don't believe in taking advantage of another person. However, when I found this story I found the best one on the whole site. If the others I gave five stars to were worth five yours is worth ten. Superb writing. Thank you.

Nice to read an erotic story, with something wonderful for the heart as well as the libido.. ;- )

soooooo goood just about says it all

This is a beautiful story. As well as the Mind Control aspect, you have two amazing characters, and a lovely concept that warms the heart. Jenny is beautiful on the inside and Tim is just Wow. There are no words for me to describe him. Men like that are rare, but they are out there, and you've made Tim one of those rare gems. A fantastic read.

Rina, Edinburgh, Scotland

Bravo! Encore!

I gave the story 5 stars, and it deserves all of them,

This was a story that caught me at the start and just kept me moving along until I was done. An excellent narrative, and one of the best I've seen on the site. Like Tim in the story, one of my favorite fetishes, and I do like the romantic twist in it rather then just sex.

I have to say thank you very much for this work, and I plan on seeing what else you have to offer on the site. This is definitely a favorite story and if others of your writings are the same you will be among my favorite authors.

Thank You

the best in the net ................. no one will be able to match the story line and narration. thanks a ton

Brought tears to my eyes. Just a delicious story, brilliantly written. Thank you Blacknight.

This is a great story and a real classic one. Very touching, tightly knit, very human, very sensitive. Connected somewhere to the good and the secretive, fantasy seeking human being living inside all of us when you go through Tim. Strong yet vulnerable and Jenny is vulnerable yet strong. Encore needed.

That was beautiful - loved the pace and structure.

I never thought I would have a boner and have freakin tears in my eyes at the same time. GREAT STORY

Fantastic writing here. Not only is it erotic, but it's hopelessly romantic in the best of ways. Loved it.

Without a doubt one of the best short stories of any type I have ever read.

What a story! I wanted to be him.

I haven't read a story like it. It's a wonderful and loving story. I just wished more people are like him and see others on third merits then looks.

This was a great story it was a little dry but what can you expect on this site? other than a little staticness it was great. a true love story

This could have very well been written as a full-length novel, one that I would read over and over again simply because it has a wonderful message behind it. You should consider that as an option; more people need to see stuff like this.

This story is so good it needs more, more, more. I was enthralled and it ended... Please write some more for the girl under the skin. She deserves to be heard!

Characters are real and alive! Beautiful story, love and erotic This is the first story I've read of yours, I hope the others are as compelling. Great !!!

that is one of the best if not the best story on this website so vivid and so detailed and so real i hope to read an addition to this story please.

Loved it :)

Liked the line about 'beside the man'. Well-done.

I read a fair few stories on this site and most of them are lacking. They lack any sort of story line, they lack good grammar and punctuation and they lack that intangible 'something' that makes for a well written story that grips the reader. Your work is the exception: it is beautifully crafted and has style and eloquence. Well done!!

Very Very well written ... although I'm not sure if it fits under the category u have put it under .. but I've enjoyed reading it anyway .. keep up the good work

Well done!!! Engaging characters. Great plot! Well written!!! Don't know what else to say but I loved it!!!

I don't usually read stories under this category, but I've read tons on Literotica, and this is by far the best. The excellent writing and character development draws the reader in to the story and it doesn't disappoint! I am going through a lot in my life right now and I know it sounds crazy, but this story really helped me to believe that there are romantic, caring, and thoughtful men left in this world. I will never forget this story, and I'm sure I will be back to re-read it many times. As several others have commented, you could certainly develop this further, as I think it would make an absolutely incredible novel or screenplay. Jenny and Tim are both very lovable and the more you read, the more you want to hear more! Thanks for sharing an outstanding piece of work.

As a girl in a similar situation, thank you.

I too found my knight after having put on a wall for many years, thinking I'd never get a second look.

Brought me to tears!

Well written and romantic. Kudos!

The high value placed on physical attractiveness damages everyone. It was a pleasure to read a story that addresses this unpleasant truth in such a beautiful way.

cheesey ending. too cheeesey for me! but loved the rest

I absolutely loved it You are a wonderful, feeling writer, one of my all time favorites-

Thanks,

Sam

Eroticism with depth? Yes, you achieved it, and in a most fantastic manner.

It's nice to be aroused and feel human free of guilt. I enjoyed it in both content and prose. Job well done!

Gerald

Nice story good piece of writing loved it

I loved it! looking forward to reading more from you. keep up the amazing work!

This is a great story on two different fronts. It does well on the erotic side. But it truly excels on the side of human interaction and that beauty is in the eye of the beholder. The mind is not only the judge of true beauty, the depth of the soul is the area of worth that many are too shallow to notice or too caught up in the media/general public idea of what beauty is. We know the mind is the most important erogenous zone!

REALLY, really good!

Great writing overall. Characters were well developed. Sex scene was pretty good. The only thing i find wrong with it is that i want to read more about the two characters. Even if it didnt have a graphic sex scene, this would make a good story of romance.

Great work!!

that was an awesome story!

thank you

One of the best stories I've read in a long time. Keep up comin'.

A love story that left me smiling

Beautiful story, made me tear up a little at the end :-)

But seriously, this has to be my favorite story on this site! I honestly thought it would take a completely different direction in the beginning, but I absolutely adore the way that it played out. Simply amazing. Pardon me whilst I read all of your other works.

This is the second story of yours that I've read that takes a subject as cringe inducing as mind control and turns it on its head and makes it touching, sensual and erotic. Bravo.

I felt drawn in and marveled at your work. I want to thank you for an exciting read. felt like I was there.

I have read most of you stories and found this to be a gem. It took me totally by surprise emotionally. Beautifully done. Again thank you for sharing with us.

Congratulations, you made a grown man cry.

The most amazing woman I ever dated, half her face including one eye was paralyzed. I didn't want anything to do with her at first, but I very quickly discovered her inner beauty and we fell head-over-heels in love in just a few days. She was so bright and intelligent, and omg, so sexual and kinkier than me! Don't judge a book by its cover.

Truly touching

By all means, iam a romantic at heart. The old fashioned romantic, who believes in one true love and all. But to say the truth, as much i thought of myself as an open minded person, i couldn't have done something as good as tim. Your story really taught me about inner beauty, and i swear i can never look at another girl without thinking about this story and its moral. Thank you a lot, for a truly touching tale...

THE VINDICATOR

A.K.A Ronnie Debb

A one off, one piece story, and you condense so much into so few words. You, sir, are a scary, fine writer. I'm sure I'll find one of your stories that I won't like, but I'll bet it will be very well written. I really could not stop reading this story. Damn!