All Comments on 'The Girl Of My Dreams'

by TheEarl

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AnonymousAnonymousover 19 years ago
Too Bloody Long!

"Emerald eyes gaze out from underneath a mane of thick red hair and my gaze shifts momentarily downwards to admire the triangle of cleavage afforded by her blouse and the creamy white thighs displayed beautifully by her miniskirt."

I voted.

neonlyteneonlyteover 19 years ago
Good to see...

Good to see you writing again. It's the best way to get it out of your system.

matriarchmatriarchover 19 years ago
Left me smiling

A very enjoyable interlude Earl, first piece of yours I've read. I shall read more. Your vocabulary and style of writing appeals to me. Mat.

impressiveimpressiveover 19 years ago
Short, but sweaty

Geez, I don't remember any lectures like THIS! Maybe I shouldn't have stayed awake. ~Imp

razor_nutrazor_nutover 19 years ago
Not too shabby

A fine read indeed. Some great elements in the writing, the description of his zipper being undone particularly stuck out in my mind. Your return to writing is definitely a good thing.

Rumple ForeskinRumple Foreskinover 19 years ago
A lot better than a poke in the eye. :)

My only complaint, other than to wonder where the hell gals like that were during my lectures, is that this should be in Fantasy, not EC.

Good work and welcome back to the weird world of writing.

Rumple

Just-LegalJust-Legalover 19 years ago
Wahoo!

Welcome back hon! Really loved this peice.

Now, to get MINE finished and submitted *g*

OhMissScarlettOhMissScarlettover 19 years ago
Whew!

That was super hot, Earl. Glad to see you're posting again and not being such a little tease, lol. Seriously, it was great and seems very polished. Keep up the good work. -T

Huckleman2000Huckleman2000over 19 years ago
Really hot!

My only suggestion would be that, I knew it was a fantasy pretty early on... It might have been better if there was mroe of a nodding-off/jerking awake thing happening. This sort of thing happens to me all the time, where I'm caught in that in-between state of waking and dreaming, unable to resolve the reality. That tension might be something that would propel the sex from one level to another, which you're already tilting towards.

I suspect I'm suggesting ideas that you already thought you incorporated - if so, I would just say that the technique just needs to get pumped up a smidge.

MagicaPracticaMagicaPracticaover 19 years ago
Enjoyed.

Lovely story.

Quiet_CoolQuiet_Coolover 19 years ago
nice...

Well done. You made it interesting, even with the use of an old theme.

Q_C

ashesatworkashesatworkalmost 19 years ago
:)

Just what I needed :)

AnonymousAnonymousover 17 years ago
Wow...

Loved this story - certainly makes the idea of lectures more appealing anyway.

Out of curiosity, which of your stories is your favourite? You write so many different things; I just wonder what you're most "interested" in…

travelgaltravelgalover 12 years ago
Sexy!

I loved this story! It made me particularly hot because I have red hair, and an Irish background. I was readily able to imagine myself being the girl in the scenario.

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