by BlackShanglan
strangely affecting, almost like an exploded haiku, three levels of awareness
I wonder though, there are five it/it's Can you rewrite this to eliminate some of them?
Very tight and powerful. The instances of "it" just seem like good pronoun usage to me, making more room for the metaphor. Kudos!
It's a testament to your talent that you can move so many with your words even as they all interpret them differently, as you well know. Or at least you should, by now.
In spite of its flaws. The ache we all feel to be wanted. I watched this develop in the Poetry forum. Lovely! ~Imp
you had me feeling angry, wistful, disappointed, defiant, and ultimately resigned. Bravo, dearest! Thank you.
And I thought it a thing worth having...
The bittersweet,defiant, matter of fact sense of this line brought the prickle of tears to my eyes. Beautiful writing, I look forward to more.
I like the symbolism expressed in this one. The twists in thought made me back up once or twice, which is good, because that way I had to read it that much closer. One of those poems that make me say "Good idea, I wish I'd thought of it."
This affected me although I'm not entirely sure why. Absolutely love it.
A metaphor can mean so many things
But second-hand clothes
Like second-hand love
Holds little appeal beyond crass functionality...
Second hand clothes like second hand love can sometimes be disappointing.
Resounds of truth.. and we all know how bittersweet that can be.