All Comments on 'a feminist on her balcony'

to stay on your good side

between this one and the last, you'd make an interesting date!

I'm beginning to enjoy your poetic attitude as well as what you write

the ending is good

no suggestions 5

an interesting first line, and I follow them to the fourth stanza, gleefully forgiving of everything that remotely would be suspect, until...slut.

Disclaimer: Following should not effect your judgment. Intended for the authour.

Even though contrast is introduced "prude" etc. the ending strikes me as trite. Seems like a mere variation of virgin,whore thing. Partially forgiven by the title.

A5 - gladly.

I'm a bit lost with this one and can't quite figure out what the relationship between the first 3 stanzas might be. Maybe you should add virgins and young girls to your list in the last stanza considering Artemis was their protector.

Not going to mark it now, will have another look later.

I am not an anthropologist, nor do I fully grasp the history of paganism, however Artemis is merely a construct for a deity that has existed far longer than the cultural construct of virginity. She represents a lot of things; namely women and the wild hunt (if you look up even a cursory definition of Artemis you'll find she is listed as overseeing childbirth as well as virginity... which is a bit contradictory). I chose her because of her wild femininity, lack of consort (Orion excluded...), relationship to the moon, her equal standing with man (namely, her twin Apollo), and her bad-ass attitude. And as for the matter of the trite ending, we can all be in agreement. I agonized over that ending. I was attempting to make these derogatory words powerful, and now resign that I have fallen short of the mark. I really want to use them, but I'm not sure I've figured it out yet. Ah, well! Back to the drawing board.

A different point of view?

The first three stanzas felt like you were treading water going nowhere (or perhaps getting ready to fly off that obviously inspirational balcony of yours lol)

And then you made a hUge splash with the fourth + fifth. Your prayer. An absolutely genius image cast from "copper faces". The list.. no big deal.

The two final stanzas together could have stood alone and yet entirely made the poem for me.

Good effort.

I must be clueless

because I like the ending

Please lord, do not be unkind to me!

i love the power of this one, the connection between artemis and the bearded warrior women leading into a contemplation of the bearded coins "boasting of/ wealth that would always/ be out of my reach" wow!

besides bitch ,cunt , skank ,whore a feminist can also be President , Pilot ,Journalist , Entrepreneur etc. though these labels do not connote powerful sexuality ,i guess the feminist need'nt exist to skillfully tweak/titillate the reader's imagination

of one who wears many crowns. TK U MLJ LV NV

bravo!