by My Erotic Tale
Creative master storyteller The poetic prose allows one to glance at the mysteries of your mind.. nice work Art thank you for the journey..
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You are so good! I am reading all your writings. you write what I don't know how to. Thankyou for sharing all your good writing with the ebworld!
the first one of the series. This one has too many words for the sake of keeping the meter.
"Yes Milady, shall I come inside?"
"No, you can be poetic from there,
I wish to be read to while I soak in a bath,"
Lady Jina let out a giggle and then a laugh.
It's a bit redundant. You are, no doubt, a grand story teller.
this continuation of the french rose. it's a great series you have put together.....nice job!!
Never mind the falterings in rhyme and rhythm, you might best start by correcting the grammatical errors. Is it true, as someone once wrote me, that you cannot find anyone willing to edit your writings. . . or is it that you just don’t care?
Lines with which an editor would help you:
The Poets words. . .
Lady Jina slipped in to. . .
. . . heart a fire.
lay in the bubbles was two French girls.
intertwined in each others. . .
Lord Flatterbush bursted. . .
Flatterbushs eyes. . . glazen.
for she was also Flatterbushs. . .
"Unless an understand. . .
You might also suggest to your toadies that they too learn to use a spell checker.
i deducks 4 badly speiling grammer & sin tack's,
I love your Rose series Art, don't listen to the one unhappy comment. But pay attention to the many that are very happy with it. I use to be a toadie but now I am a princess. Thanks Art, looking for part 4, I read it so I know it's coming!
S~ :)
and hope you will continue with more of this "Days of Olde" series, Art. It has been so enjoyable a journey thus far and I'm looking forward to reading more. Thank you!<smile>
BTW - if what Aunty Muse mentioned in her/his comment here is true, and you are indeed looking for someone to edit grammatical and spelling errors, I am more than happy to offer My help. I may not be a strong poet, but I am one that has a firm grip on the intrinsic nature of sentence composition. My offer stands indefinitely, Art.
And I don't try to belittle people in public comments either. It shows a lack of professionalism that doesn't increase anyone's desire to better their work - and shouldn't that be the intended goal?
Vixxx
Now this gets better
with twists and turns - they're all players!