by My Erotic Tale
It's an amusing anecdote, but could use a little bit more work. The necessity of rhyme forced some awkward choices on several occasions, and the pivoting into the last stanza felt hurried. All things considered, though, not a bad effort.
It might not be zen
but as in the "club"
it's still vision
fresh and unclouded.
Let us see more.
This read like a mixture of your two trademarks - a cup of stanzas in fable form blended with just a pinch of zen. It made Me smile and feel good and that's all the taste of a poem I need to give it a 5. Thanks for the new recipe and the grin, Art!
Vixxx