All Comments on 'Bach's Lunch'

Mozart you say?

Then perhaps I will wait ~

Bach disagrees with my palate.

Delius ..u know its on our morning alarm clock...you have some very unique word play here ...and well put together ..very polished and tight...lovely..blue

Easy to chew, but I think the constant beating on musical terms becomes too predictable, and might bore an advanced reader for sure. In my opinion, you should view this as a work in progress, and see if you can add a more subtle touch to it, a bit of unpredictability.

Technically, there is certainly nothing to quibble about. It is just a matter of suddeness and a bit of surprise, which I think would add greatly to the overall quality of the piece.

here is nice. and if i was a listener of classical music, i could offer something. nevertheless, it seems to be a piece that reflects a particular mood. say for instance, if it was ACDC or any other rock group, its tone would thump a bit harder. aside from that, if the walls started to shake, and pictures started to fall, there might be a good laugh. would you expect anything less from someone that likes to be sarcastic and humorous from time to time.

Very similar to what a middle school student did a few years ago. That one received a passing grade. I guess yours does, too, although you are well past middle school.

Being a Jazz musician I feel like this is old home week and consider it a distinct delight to review this poem. I, of course loved and got a kick out of Mr. Sack's musical terms and great sense of humor. Bravo Mr. Sack!

This poem was mentioned in the Archival Review thread, in a picking through Lit's archive of over 34,000 poems.

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Delightful. Perhaps I am possessed of a pedestrian mind, but I thought it perfect. Although I respect the opinions of others who have commented, I did not have any problems with this piece. Well done!

and for the others who follow, TK U MLJ LV NV