All Comments on 'Bonfire'

I like the way you've put together little elements to create the whole image here. And, BTW, have a happy big 30.

this poem was mentioned on the thread 'New Poem Reviews'

thanks for the read

This is good but doesn't wow me as much as some of your other poems have, MM.

Suggestions:

I would drop the commas in the first stanza to help the rhythm,

it sounded odd when I read it, having these two pauses there.

Likewise, I would put in an active verb in the second stanza to give a greater impact. Perhaps 'seeping' would do the job?