All Comments on 'Chrysalis'

...if you're going to abandon them? The structure seemed to erode with each verse. Still, like the tombs of Egypt, you hid treasure:

"let me savor those eyes

one demon at the time"

Thanks for the read, Liar.

with other comment..and the treasure therein....blue

I don't see the structure eroding: I like the transition from individual to shared experiences over the poem and felt that permitted some structural change. The pyrimids, in fact, are more thematic than the title as they recall lumps in the bedcovers: perhaps a better title comes from them.