by Liar
Loved it. Didn't think I was going to after the first few lines, but it molded into a fabulous sentiment that I loved. I love your use of repetition. You do it so deftly. Nice.
could a poem rock my world more? No. The intensity that resonates from this poem, ,just kicked me in the gut, and I felt your melting your need, your craving. Wasn't hard on my eyes, my ears or my need for great poetry. Good job. I absolutely LOVE reading this one out loud. I rock reading this poem. :D *laughing*
How do you write Daniel into eternity? I think you just did, sweetie. It was so telling, I almost felt in the room when it was happening. Beautiful, Liar, as always.
~lucky
breathtaking! with every word you pulled me further into the emotion behind the words. i really loved this one.
Your way with words is breathtaking. I read your words and immediately want them to be whispered into my ear.
Well written interogatives really draw the reader in, looking to offer his own answers.
This poem was mentioned in the Archival Review thread, in a picking through Lit's archive of over 37,000 poems.
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