by sandyb
I'm not a big fan of most of the so-called erotic poems, but this was really well written. I agree with the comment about lines 3 and 4. I also thought the deliberate misspelling of "hiway" was an original poetic device. It made me take notice without confusing me, and I recognized it as intentional. The metrics of the lines with the variation worked well too. Nicely done!