All Comments on 'empty space'

Line 8 should say, "...its jagged pain" not it's. Fucking grammar.

this is one of those poems, that needs to sit with me. Right now the only thing I can come up with, is consider changing and to of, (of absent winds). Strange and intriguing. A5. Consider:

and wide mouths

gape from rotting hulls

groan toward distant whale call

Play with this, I like this.

came back

can we find another word for "fervent" has to be one of the top ten overused words in Literotica

This is very good. A haunting piece of poetry.

that are mentioned below, this is good. I might add, look at something besides jagged. It's another word I seem to read often (and use!). I like the way the title sets this poem up.

like annaswirls with yet another alias. bore- ink