All Comments on 'Five'

Although the structure of this poem is foriegn to me... the haunting message got under my skin... I could feel the ride on the winds of the past ... 55 to 5 to 55! The essence of this work is good thank you for the read!

Du Lac~

This tells a wonderful and poignant story. There are some simple grammar errors that should be cleaned up, but i really liked this one.

Flyguy

I truly like this poem. The first part is just wonderful. So simply written, yet not a simple poem. The last few lines feel as though they could be tweaked some more.

A haunting reflection upon the lifelong memories of childhood events.

one question why is that one line so long it folds over?

Still, there is an offbeat balance between 1st and 2nd sections.

speak from the heart. They need no special embellishments to sound "poetic" because their simple truths speak to the reader. That, I believe, is what makes your poem so good--honest feelings, stated without frills. Yes, it needs a bit of editing (as most poems do), but you nailed it. :)

Hope to see more of your writing.

About time you posted something mate.Different to what I expected from your other stuff.

The honesty you accept at five becomes an embarrassement at fifty-five.

This poem was selected from Lit's archive of over 39,000 poems for inclusion in today's Archival Review.<br>

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