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The perfect portrait of a frustrated, agonized poet. Although it's a bit over cooked here and there. I really liked the Gollum reference. :)

My point exactly.

Thank you. >?(((><

love the tension in this work

well done!

these 10 lines can nearly stand alone in the poem. When I came back to read it again and again I skipped right to here. So awesome, it feels good, doesn't it?

"But the poet clenches his fist

in a Gollum dwarfing snarl

around his own his presscioussss

golden black lead and pearwood

powerless dumbass dildo

that could never write the

mumbling of that tambourine strung

heart echoing too much inside walls

of a glass bubble becoming"

too distorted to decipher"

how much I love how you express yourself! It comes out so naturally and instinctively.

I can feel the tension in the knots of my stomach and the brassy taste on my tongue. Very powerful writing. I actually took a deep breath as I finished it.

This poem was selected from Lit's archive of over 39,500 poems for inclusion in today's Archival Review.<br>

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