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by Smokey125

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HoneyAdoredHoneyAdoredalmost 10 years ago
Your poetic cherry has burst all over this place

For me, your poem shone from the outset and there were glints of gold throughout.

The only line I struggled with was;

'Offer I my lonely heart her for the taking'

and that was because I just could not get it off my tongue, I got a bit tongue-tied.

On the whole, I loved it.

Well done and please write more poetry.

5ed

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Writing lesbian erotica has become one of the most important things in my life. I try to make all my main characters at least reasonably three-dimensional, and balance out the Smokey Sagas between sweet, fluffy, light-hearted pieces with happy endings, and rough, sinister tale...