All Comments on 'Homo Erectus'

pageon revels,

too much!!!!!!

Saipens - typo? fosil

do you know I lost a 'contest' once because of typos, misspelling and got a lecture to boot, I don't know why I'm passing on that useless information, (assholes looking from stilts) has no bearing on the five

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.....rhythm here and there - nothing that can't be fixed by a read-through and re-do. In general, well thought out and interesting to read.

that some of the rhyming, especially in that first strophe, aren't really helping the poem. And beyond that the poem is full of interesting ideas and some great lines, but I feel like different parts are stronger than the piece overall. I think like Tess said, if you tightened it up a little it would all come together better. Just my opinion, Harry, and like I said there's a lot good here so don't be too hard on yourself! :rose:

before sapient savant, TK U MLJ LV NV

Homo erectus, also known as the upright man (walking that is) although in certain environs, it refers to a gay with an erection. Which do you prefer? What I love about my gay friends is their civility, artistic talents and acceptance of generalities. Take your choice. Are you aware that the name of the first Homo erectus was Hairy? No relation I assume, but those guys were famous for bad spelling, I mean bad smelling. Anyway, we all love you Hairy, I mean Harry and my erectus salutes you! I think he likes you! In the meantime I am pool side, busy chewing walnuts for my little dog who seems to eat them faster than I can chew. Who says this place is going to the dogs? Keep on this topic, at least for four hours before calling the doctor, dear Harry, for what is a man without his Erectus but a sober law abiding citizen with an empty dance card..... lov ya Hairy!, I mean Harry. When are we going to the Burrito King? I'm buying....who says there is no such thing as a free lunch? No, we are not taking turns!

I'll take this down tomorrow. but like you said. I promised (or threatened :)) I was not trying to put down anyone's sexuality and anyway, technically you're bi-sexual and I'm just hairy Harry.

The girls say it is only good if it is up, I'm sure the gay bottoms would agree--and it is an honor that you have fucked me, I mean stuck me there !

As for my sexuality, remember we are on the internet, where prevarication and exaggeration are not permitted, I can't help it if I have known some transsexuals who could pass as beautiful women. I never considered them anything but beautiful women. Does that open the closet door? Oh well, it does get stuffy in there, but I would gladly trade 20 years for the experiences I have had, for what is life without living?

I liked the word play here, Harry, and I'm assuming the typos were deliberate.

Greenmountaineer here. For some reason, I still can't post comments under my log-in.

The comments are as humerous as the poem lol :)