by My Erotic Tale
Whar woman wouldn't like to hear,
"I thought of nothing
till I thought
...of you."
Another good write.
But I'm not totally convinced you need the last line. Better to let the reader fill in who or what is being thought of, depending on his own experiences?
from another angle. perhaps all the things that you have described up to the ending was merely like in the sub-conscious (mindlessly present) and then when you say - until i thought of you just leaves that a bit more poignant than all of the other stuff that you mentioned prior. that is my take on it.