All Comments on 'matinee'

Loved this kicker line:

"Her bronzy brass bold body hides"

That's just the sort of line that's perfect for being read aloud.

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Peace,

Angeline

total agreement with the two comments that line rules...blue

the ending of your poem was my favorite part. The image of selling tickets to a clown loving someone is a funny image.

happening here:

Held tight as jealous petals might

Bekon wanton bees a little deeper in (not sure abouit "in" - here, also think it is "beckon")

You are pressing alliteration to the limit of it's effectiveness

Sin’s silk sheets seek daylight’s danger

Her bronzy brass bold body hides

advise backing off a little

Lush images abound in this poem which is an absolute delight.