by honybipola
Hey this is really good! It's nice to see those feelings put into words.
OK. So, I like this poem. I don't love it but I think its got potential. I think you certainly have the skills to be great at this but you need more practice. That's actually a self serving comment because more practice for you, means posting here and then WE get to read them.
That being said, I stay away from poetry myself because it's tough. Word choices in fiction are bad enough but in poetry? Yeah, they're crucial. Anyway, would love to see more from you.
Have fun:)
I totally appreciate all the nice feedback and comments guys...@exfireman...for the love, yeah ton of thanks, love your work too; @tazz317...well, hope all the pieces fit in your story, dig a plot or three...you're the better writer anyway...;@Orangesandapples...your story on the other hand has so much feeling and emotions that it's easy to lose yourself into your characters...; @HaydenDLinder...gee! kind words aren't wasted...I hope I got half of your skill with such great ideas...I might take it to heart though....