All Comments on 'Once We Were Fluent'

Nicely done, calli.

"Spine broken/pages" and "old code book/tear stained" are very sharp images. However, the syntax that followed in the stanza felt clunky to me. It didn't add confusion to my understanding of the stanza, so in that regard I suppose it's a quibble but still felt off, particularly "by frustration/fighting realization" and seemed like a run on sentence. Because the other two weren't, the middle stanza stuck out in the wrong way for me at least in spite of the two powerful metaphors mentioned above.

the relationship is definitely archelogic, TK U MLJ LV NV

I'll take give it some thought, see if I can clear it up a bit in time. Your comments and feedback are always appreciated.

I really liked this but agree with gm's comments on the last verse. Would it still work for you if it ended after the 2nd verse?

also in the second verse, you might consider changing

by frustration / fighting realization

to

by frustration / and the realization