All Comments on 'rain vs river'

If you only offered the reader the first strophe, I'd still be more than satisfied with this poem. Very good.

I love the sound of this. It flows with an elegance through rather large chunks of text that could easily clog the poem. A rather interresting break from your recent minimalistic offerings. And I really like message of self gained strength. Really uplifting stuff.

Give Eve the first strophe and I will take the last. This could easily be two poems on a theme. The first is inner frustration/anger and the second is physical pain/exhaustion. The challenge of the latter is far more obvious than the former. >?(((><

words, rolling me over and over. well done.

I wonder though at the end, "and taking the fist daring steps" should fist be first? If so, you might want to edit.

jim :)

Eve and Ry got the ends

can I have the middle?