- Non-Erotic Poetry
- Sovereign of the Sand
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I wander through deserts - a sovereign of the sand.
Dead voices speak though me -as dry echos in a room,
Unblinking Eye,Sun, Dog - only I understand.
Arid Lord of deserts, exhumed from pharaoh's tomb.
- COMMENTS
twelveooneover 13 years agoAuthorechos - the way they spelled in the olden days, a little sand in the skull, perhaps - don't get me started on asps.
Those dashes, change of thought to ironic sarcasm, why pharaoh is not capped also.
Or maybe just a little sand...
PoetGuyover 13 years agoPoet Guy likes this poem, but questions spelling ("echoes"), capitalization ("Lord" but "pharaoh"?), and punctuation (why all the dashes?). All technicalities, of course, and mere chaff as far as the poem itself reads, so he will simply respond to riddle with riddle:
She would stamp one's hand with an asp,
Like a passport she had kissed
In an awkward moment. To read her letters
Is to die, sunk in hot, perserving sands.
hyperthread1over 13 years agoPer our discussion about line length, not only does this flow, you manage to communicate everything in only 4 lines. I'm taking notes...
vrosej10over 13 years agoBut excellent. Love it. I do enjoy the short stuff.
