All Comments on 'Sovereign of the Sand'

But excellent. Love it. I do enjoy the short stuff.

Per our discussion about line length, not only does this flow, you manage to communicate everything in only 4 lines. I'm taking notes...

Poet Guy likes this poem, but questions spelling ("echoes"), capitalization ("Lord" but "pharaoh"?), and punctuation (why all the dashes?). All technicalities, of course, and mere chaff as far as the poem itself reads, so he will simply respond to riddle with riddle:

She would stamp one's hand with an asp,

Like a passport she had kissed

In an awkward moment. To read her letters

Is to die, sunk in hot, perserving sands.

echos - the way they spelled in the olden days, a little sand in the skull, perhaps - don't get me started on asps.

Those dashes, change of thought to ironic sarcasm, why pharaoh is not capped also.

Or maybe just a little sand...