All Comments on 'The old man with no name'

I like this a lot, though there may be a few spots that could be edited.

The only spot that really bothered me was this:

"I have seen him there

in the wild wood

permanent scowl

etched on parched lips"

The last two lines are a bit too wordy.

Maybe you could try:

I have seen him there

in the wild wood

a scowl etched

on parched lips

Your poems come from people near and dear to you. That maybe why they appear a bit too wordy, at least to me.

Try writing about the last beautiful stranger you saw.

Unless you got lucky, I think you'll have a shorter but

more powerful piece of poetry. I did like this poem.

in light of the fact that it is of your father. but what i'm grasping onto is the fact it could be the one that really isn't known. what gives me that impression is from the title. maybe i'm wrong. he may be close to you, but it looks to say he's a stranger. this could be of a situation that you have been involved with too. i'm just working with what i see. maybe all is needed here in the poem if that is the case. i do like the feel overall. anyways.......that's my input.....it's worth a 5 to me......don

A lovely ethereal rendering in tribute to a much loved Father. May the Son enjoy the feeling of love and gratification that writing such a touching tribute brings.