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greenmountaineergreenmountaineeralmost 7 years ago

The only thing that saves line 1 with, I think, some clunky diction(too many harsh consonants) is line14, Sweet O.

"blend with leaf mould and ferns" sounds cluncky to me despite your signature iambic pentameter. Perhaps it's because "blend" is a stronger word than "with," a preposition where the emphasis is.

SweetOblivionSweetOblivionalmost 7 years agoAuthor
thank you

I shall think about that carefully

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