All Comments on 'To Vaporize'

Suggestions: Change "I am tumbling" to "I tumble" (passive to active verb). I find "ocean of confusion" a touch cliche. Maybe change to something like "the disorienting sea". That's my personal taste, of course. Yours may be different.

Creates quite a sense of flailing and the hope that at some time yet to come, life may come to be ordered and sane.

Mista-fied, I'm intrigued.