All Comments on 'undo ki'

by twelveoone

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WickedEveWickedEvealmost 17 years ago
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I think this is excellent, 1201.

My Erotic TrailMy Erotic Trailalmost 17 years ago
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I 'truely' liked your poem but feel compelled to shorten it even more, (since you chose to keep it short) Haiku perhaps (grinin'

lostandfounderlostandfounderalmost 17 years ago
Latley,

I've had too much to do to undo the undone. (or is that too much to do about nothing?) Seriously, this is one great poem. Masterfully done 1201

wildsweetonewildsweetonealmost 17 years ago
i'm in awe

i love your line breaks, your stanza breaks, your succinct language. i find all, excellent. i do not doubt that you have each and every word exactly as you want it, but still find myself questioning 'is'. should it be 'was'? (my lack of education showing)

thank you for sharing your poetry and for giving me another level to seek.

wso

twelveoonetwelveoonealmost 17 years agoAuthor
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I think it is "is", doing implies present tense. TY. This is just fodder for what I thought was a neet bi-lingual play on words. Japanese - excersise breath, or something like that. Ki prononced the same as key, at least aroung here.

ghost_girlghost_girlover 16 years ago
really

your mastery of the minimal is astounding.awe-fully, yours

g_g

annaswirlsannaswirlsabout 15 years ago
how is it

How is it I never commented on this one? I remember reading and loving it before... I am sorry I missed it. I wonder if you ever come and read your comments. Post card: wish you were here right now.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 13 years ago
heh

un dookie? dooty free poetry zone over there-------->

twelveoonetwelveooneover 10 years agoAuthor
anon

asshole over ^ pointy stick

the pungent Punji

TsothaTsothaabout 10 years ago

"Engaged with doing what is left undone" — day dreaming? :-)

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