All Comments on 'Until I Stop'

Sad soliloquy, S.O., regarding loss. At first blush, I wasn’t sure whose portrait you kissed, but the thought of suicide was an effective inference to conclude it was a lover.

Your use of structured language in the sonnet format always impresses me. You nearly always provide food for thought, which is what a good poem does, even a lament.

That rocking (oneself to sleep?) seems to be the only available solution at the time gives added weight to just how devastating the loss was, a very effective and dramatic ending.

My only quibble is with the first line. “May” felt redundant because “Sometimes” already suggests the subjunctive. I might have used the ironic “Of course, the tears will stop!” because the next sentence begins emphatically with “Surely” and ends quite the opposite with a question mark.

I so very much like your work and am glad you continue to post.

Splendid sonnet. I'd retain the 'may' as it completes the meter.