All Comments on 'Waking Down'

starts nicely but becomes tedious

WoW

Perhaps split it up into two or more seperate pieces, there's a lot of emotion, almost overwhelming for the reader. You're ideas a great and you obviously want to share them. Try not to cram it all in one piece, make notes, pick and choose, you'll find it helps to distill your thoughts in the end. Keep writing!

Tess

I can't believe it. You are so underappreciated.