All Comments on 'Waking Up In A Bruised Room'

This is a remarkable poem, Liar. One to sniff, swirl and taste before swallowing.

It should be gobbled whole. Maybe that's just me.

I think it should be gobbled up

until:

"Where were you yesterday?"

requires a quick drink of water as your mind comes to a halt with this Koan like line

then gobble up the rest

Then I have to confess I burped.

I think you're a poet! ;) Brilliant poem, I especially liked the last stanza and the punch at the end.

Excellent.. I love the unusual setting and the open door to the writers mind..

ty

Du~

kind of creepy, but morbidly interesting! I think it would read better without repeating "last night's" in the first stanza.

While others reading this may have sensed dark and macabre elements, I felt this poem eluded to a fully blown out BDSM scene. Either or neither way, it was an excellently written poem. Be proud of this one!

Vixxx

It's funny how different words mean different things to different people. The BDSM went right over my head until I read the other PCs. :) The poem reads more as a fragmented relationship metaphor to me, but all the same, it's very powerful and evokes a sort of breathless melancholy. Well done.

to be savored as other PC's mentioned. One read through isnt enough. Great job, Liar, however...how could we expect any less from you

v~

walking through the hallways of poetry where words grab from the walls and scream from the shadows. This work is a journey I appreciate. I am not so gifted a poet to grade those of others, but if I were, five stars is not sufficient.